What is a cloud 31/07/2015
The cloud is a candyfloss that taste like candy.
It is floating in the sky with God saying hi and goodbye.
The cloud is everywhere in the world but not space.
It is a soft swishing feeling like a marshmallow saying hey.
The cloud is white as a bucket of the sky and people are happy.
This is an example of my learning that shows me using metaphors and similes, we had to write a poem in class that showed our use of figurative language. I enjoyed making the lines rhyme and I like the part about God. Please comment and leave me feedback. Thank You!
Hey Nika, I am a Student from Wesley Intermediate school named Siutaisa.
ReplyDeleteI can see that you can picture something happening with clouds and I like it.
I like the way you used similes and metaphors to describe that the cloud is candyfloss that tastes like candy and it is floating in the sky like god is saying hi and goodbye.
Maybe next time, add Onomatopeia.
For me as a Student, I rate 100.
Incredible writing Nika.
Fantastic work Nika! The metaphors you have used are superb and really show an excellent understanding of figurative language. I agree with Siutaisa- try some onomatopoeia :-)
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